The Beach is cold. Show not tell.
The furious breeze blew againts my face, as my teeth were chatering.While I was stroling down the hard damp sand."brrrr" I shivered In the breeze.I started to grow goosebumps and my lips faded to purple.
To Be Continued....
Heey Matt,
ReplyDeleteThis is a great start to your writing hopefully there is going to be another one? , I reckon that you could have written a lot more than just though don't you think so? ,
Keep up the good work Matthew and Go hard
Cruz :)